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Richard Ritenbaugh's avatar

Finally! Min La gets some sleep! And the River Voyage is a fantastic idea.

Anthony's avatar

Bo Han playing whatever game it takes to avoid playing THE game.

I am enjoying this Lasoth trio. Ovor and Sen Lan’s introduction and the peek into how they communicate with eachother a number of chapters back was excellent.

Jeff's avatar

Excellent. Strong dialogue and brisk pacing. Excited for next chapter!

Meya's avatar

One note, near the beginning you start 2 paragraphs with "More than that" I just found it may be a little repetitive (?)

Hilary Layne's avatar

I was experimenting stylistically with that. I suppose it wasn't quite working.