Oh! If you mean "begrudged her her loyalty" that one is intentional. Like when you say, "he didn't begrudge him his envy." Though it comes through a little awkward with the female pronouns.
Great chapter. I have been suspecting the Min La is Nŭnon reveal for a while.
Possible typo towards the middle: should the "his" in "even his own House" actually be "her"? In context, "her" makes more sense.
"Min La understood the strangeness of the Grand Steward’s choice. Lŭ Lin Ăvan was a subject of much speculation in all the Houses of Láokoth, even his own House."
Understood, hence my "possible" because I could see both versions working. Sentence structure wise "her" made more sense. Paragraph wise, "his" made sense as well.
Also given that Min La's house has not been officially revealed yet at this point, I was inclined to default to "her" as the only known house under discussion.
So subtly foreshadowed, something I suspected from Min La's comments. What a reason for his conflicted stance with So Ga. This chapter was a lot of good worldbuilding and enjoyably done. More and more I suspect I know the reasoning behind the attempt on the Prince. It will be fun to find out if I am right, or if a twist awaits. Fantastic last few chapters.
Hi Hilary, I checked on your YouTube but couldn’t find an email address, so I’m leaving a comment here. I’m not sure if you remember, but my twin sister, Nicole, and I used to know you back in the tiny town of SM. We recently found your channel—we think it’s great—and wanted to get in touch. If that’s something you’re interested in, please email me: daringlydare@gmail.com
Glad to see you’re doing well and still writing. We are, too.
OMG?!! That cliff hanger!!!😫😫 you can't leave us with it for too long ! I'm so desperate for another chapter alreadyyy😭😭
And I'll self employ myself as your typo girly😅 though there aren't many anyways so props to you♡
from the paragraph "That Lŭ Lin Ăvan had put her loyalty to her king..." fourth sentence you just repeated the word 'her' twice
I'll happily accept the tireless efforts of the typo girly! Thank you!
(I'm going to have the next chapter up no later than the weekend)
Oh! If you mean "begrudged her her loyalty" that one is intentional. Like when you say, "he didn't begrudge him his envy." Though it comes through a little awkward with the female pronouns.
I see, I guess it was kind of an awkward way to phrase it so caught my eye (can't wait for your next update♡!!)
Great chapter. I have been suspecting the Min La is Nŭnon reveal for a while.
Possible typo towards the middle: should the "his" in "even his own House" actually be "her"? In context, "her" makes more sense.
"Min La understood the strangeness of the Grand Steward’s choice. Lŭ Lin Ăvan was a subject of much speculation in all the Houses of Láokoth, even his own House."
I understand it might be a little unclear, yes. I might adjust that before final printing. But I was referring to Min La's own House.
And thank you!
Understood, hence my "possible" because I could see both versions working. Sentence structure wise "her" made more sense. Paragraph wise, "his" made sense as well.
Also given that Min La's house has not been officially revealed yet at this point, I was inclined to default to "her" as the only known house under discussion.
So subtly foreshadowed, something I suspected from Min La's comments. What a reason for his conflicted stance with So Ga. This chapter was a lot of good worldbuilding and enjoyably done. More and more I suspect I know the reasoning behind the attempt on the Prince. It will be fun to find out if I am right, or if a twist awaits. Fantastic last few chapters.
Hi Hilary, I checked on your YouTube but couldn’t find an email address, so I’m leaving a comment here. I’m not sure if you remember, but my twin sister, Nicole, and I used to know you back in the tiny town of SM. We recently found your channel—we think it’s great—and wanted to get in touch. If that’s something you’re interested in, please email me: daringlydare@gmail.com
Glad to see you’re doing well and still writing. We are, too.
No need to ask for forgiveness I LOVEE long chapters!!!