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Ross Valentino Osman-Dent's avatar

Your YouTube series has been no small revelation to me, Hilary! Exited to get stuck into your own writing 😇

Hilary Layne's avatar

Thank you! I hope you enjoy it!

Jeff's avatar

👍🏻

Jay Morton's avatar

I jumped through hoops and joined a social media platform just so I could let you know that I found you on YouTube.

Also, I wanted you to know that I have found your talks on writing more helpful that the gatekeeping formulas often behind paywalls.

You had practical advice and information that had helped me rethink my approach to trying to write.

Im not trying to write a novel, but I have ideas and stories I want to develop for a comic book. I tried to get some writers to help; it wasn’t “my story.”

Again, thank you for sharing your thoughts.

Hilary Layne's avatar

Thank you, I'm happy you found me! I'm glad my videos have been helping you and I hope they continue to do so. Good luck with your comic book!

Abi Petroski's avatar

I loved watching your writing advice videos from your channel. So when I came here to check out your story I was completely hooked after the first chapter! I was wondering if you could tell me the name of the artist that drew your beautiful cover? <3

Hilary Layne's avatar

Thank you for reading, I hope you continue to enjoy it!

Hilary Layne's avatar

I'm not completely satisfied with the current cover and I'm looking into having it redone. When I do I will absolutely provide the artist's information!

Eric R Montour's avatar

I found your site through your youtube channel. I was pleasantly surprised. As an avid fantasy reader, this story looks like it may scratch that itch. I am always looking for new kinds of stories, even if it turns out to not be fantasy. Though having a map, clues me in.

Hilary Layne's avatar

Thank you, I'm glad you found me! I hope you enjoy it reading it. I'd say it's a bit fantasy, maybe a sprinkle of fantasy...

Eric R Montour's avatar

I found your site through your youtube channel. I was pleasantly surprised. As an avid fantasy reader, this story looks like it may scratch that itch. I am always looking for new kinds of stories, even if it turns out to not be fantasy. Though having a map, clues me in.

Rachel's avatar

I’m very sorry but this novel seems confused. It seemed to be a Western take on a Wuxia novel without the things that make that a Wuxia novel (underdog protagonist, class struggle, realistic setting) but doesn’t have enough magic to be a Xianxia novel. Also the language is not amazing; “The air had recieved a sugary sweet smell?” I’d recommend researching the genre you’re trying to emulate before getting this published and hiring an editor. Otherwise you’ll be condemned to genre in-betweeness and the clunky prose won’t help.

A.C. Cargill, All-Human Author's avatar

AI is a scourge on mankind. But as your video How Modern Schools Make Terrible Writers (Deliberately) shows, it is just the next step in the process. Thank goodness I predate "critical literacy" and learned to read for the pure pleasure of it.

My 2 lists of writers who have declared they don't use AI in their writing (which is getting trickier to avoid by the day):

AI Free — https://accargillauthor.substack.com/p/welcome-to-the-ai-free-zone-no-4

Mostly AI Free — https://accargillauthor.substack.com/p/announcing-the-mostly-ai-free-zone-e3f

My website:

https://accargillauthor.wordpress.com

Adam Duell's avatar

Is there an epub version of this available? Would love to read it on my e-reader.

Patrick's avatar

I got to say part of me almost hates you for opening my eyes the way you did in your Youtube videos. I'll never be able to read a book, watch a movie or TV show or play a video game again without seeing these things you have taught me. So while I am the better for it, I find it hard to thank you. But perhaps I will be better at discerning the art I choose to enjoy in the future and can thank you then. In the mean time I do plan on reading your book.

Sage Khan's avatar

I have watched your videos and it is helping me with some of my work as well. I am a tech writer but shifted to writing short stories as well. I would love to connect with you. Here is my linkedin = www.linkedin.com/in/sagekhan

Michael Medlen's avatar

Is this available in print form?

Hilary Layne's avatar

Not yet. I will be getting it ready for print as soon as the serialization is done, though!

Eric R Montour's avatar

I found your site through your youtube channel. I was pleasantly surprised. As an avid fantasy reader, this story looks like it may scratch that itch. I am always looking for new kinds of stories, even if it turns out to not be fantasy. Though having a map, clues me in.

Eric R Montour's avatar

I found your site through your youtube channel. I was pleasantly surprised. As an avid fantasy reader, this story looks like it may scratch that itch. I am always looking for new kinds of stories, even if it turns out to not be fantasy. Though having a map, clues me in.