Got here by accident (thanks algos). I’m not a huge fan of prologues, but this one was great! The dying king’s melancholia is captured nicely, but more than that, the order in the end is somewhat ambiguous that tickles just the right way.
On the nitpicky side, you could make a super quick polishing round (stuff like the prime minister always referred in the same way, with capitals or without, and so on); dust it up for show, so to speak.
Have to keep this one in mind! Thanks for sharing!
I'm kind of glad the person mentioned this ... do you ever want to receive more technical feed back on little things that slip by your diligent review? and if so, where? I've never felt comfortable pointing out things like this in public areas --- it took me a long time to learn to stop doing that as a teacher :D
As someone who has read a lot of the previously posted chapters, this prologue fills me with both hope and dread. Thanks to this, I'm pretty sure I'm going to want to cry when I reach the novel's end. Better get out my tissue box...
First page is a BANGER! Very easy to read, clear distinct characters. I rarely feel anything for characters, yet here I am almost crying over a prologue! Hoping the rest of your novel is this good, and worth devouring.
This is meant to be the prologue, read at the very beginning. It isn't mandatory, but it's meant to set the stage and tone just a bit at the beginning.
Got here by accident (thanks algos). I’m not a huge fan of prologues, but this one was great! The dying king’s melancholia is captured nicely, but more than that, the order in the end is somewhat ambiguous that tickles just the right way.
On the nitpicky side, you could make a super quick polishing round (stuff like the prime minister always referred in the same way, with capitals or without, and so on); dust it up for show, so to speak.
Have to keep this one in mind! Thanks for sharing!
Indeed, good catch! Thank you. And thank you for reading!
I'm kind of glad the person mentioned this ... do you ever want to receive more technical feed back on little things that slip by your diligent review? and if so, where? I've never felt comfortable pointing out things like this in public areas --- it took me a long time to learn to stop doing that as a teacher :D
From time to time a reader will send an email replying to a chapter alerting me to typos.
I hope you go back and read the Book - It is pretty awesome :)
As if he was a gentle breeze moving through the grass was so poetic. Sorry I'll be doing these through my whole read
I'm not sure why but this chapter gave me a heavy sense of melancholy.. it's like, after all this thrill and adventure that's how things typically end
As someone who has read a lot of the previously posted chapters, this prologue fills me with both hope and dread. Thanks to this, I'm pretty sure I'm going to want to cry when I reach the novel's end. Better get out my tissue box...
First page is a BANGER! Very easy to read, clear distinct characters. I rarely feel anything for characters, yet here I am almost crying over a prologue! Hoping the rest of your novel is this good, and worth devouring.
Excited to see how you apply what you teach.
me too
I’m currently on chapter 27, is this a stand-alone chapter or one that fallows #56? Thanks Hilary!
This is meant to be the prologue, read at the very beginning. It isn't mandatory, but it's meant to set the stage and tone just a bit at the beginning.