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Jeff's avatar
Jan 8Edited

Hilary, this is becoming a 3D chess game... and I have difficulty with checkers. But I'm hanging on as best I can :) This was a beautifully written and paced chapter. Kudos.

Hilary Layne's avatar

Thank you! (I have trouble too, and I have charts and graphs and such...)

DeeKay Reader of stuffs.'s avatar

I cannot help but conjure the image of So Ga and Min La having a mental breakdown as they are continually surrounded by armies in the mists... Never far never closer.

This is so wonderfully crafted I get a rush of excitement when another clue drops like a feather. Unexpected and easily unnoticed but there none the less.

Anthony's avatar

Sen La: Cousin, would you like to play Settlers of Catan?

Bo Han: *Eyes Narrow* *Looks out the window.*

Jhaerlyn's avatar

Second, I really enjoy how the political complexities ground the story line and momentarily make you forget the Other world has ethereal tendrils throughout much of the story. I'm highly suspicious of that Ena Li ...

Jhaerlyn's avatar

First -- you DEFINITELY do not need to apologize for "delaying" your work. This was not delayed at all! Especially since I figured you'd wait until after the holiday's at least. As for fevers-- they are better for poetry writing :D

Meg's avatar

“Mosaic designs along the far wall…” love it. And the whole prince and pauper switching thing that’s potentially under way is super entertaining.