I’m struggling with this chapter… but I can’t pinpoint what it is. Something seems missing or not in harmony with the rest… it’s like when the band is tuning, but there’s that one instrument that is slightly off. It doesn’t sound terrible, but there’s is a …wawawa that doesn’t quite fit. And yet I like it, I like the introduction to the mom and the further unveiling of the past…
I really like how you bound the disparate thoughts and of the first three chapters together by continually returning to the enlo cakes.
Man I want some Enlo cakes. Also I like how strong and feminine you made the mother Queen Na Mor.
I’m struggling with this chapter… but I can’t pinpoint what it is. Something seems missing or not in harmony with the rest… it’s like when the band is tuning, but there’s that one instrument that is slightly off. It doesn’t sound terrible, but there’s is a …wawawa that doesn’t quite fit. And yet I like it, I like the introduction to the mom and the further unveiling of the past…